Azuma Nagato

[Azuma Nagato]

Azuma Nagato son of Kaemon Nagato

Main Information;; The Known

xx Nicknames

Demon Killer, Satan's Son, Trusted One and Bloody Brother

xx Age / Birthday

Azuma is 21 an birthday is March 7

xx Gender

Male

xx Kingdom / Providence

Diamond

xx Occupation

Freelance Warrior

xx Society / Group

None yet

xx Rank/Class

Commoner work to make ends meet  

xx Weapons

Uses one handed Kantana which is 29.8 inches long and Carries 2 Tantos that are 5.9 inches long. As last resort has grappling hook more of use to scale buildings instead of fighting

xx Magic

Uses no magic

The Mirror Room

xx Face Claim

Date Masamune from  Dokuganryū (One-Eyed Dragon).

xx Appearance

Azuam has jet black hair with silver eyes. Azuma also has a scar on his back staring at the Shoulder and ending at the spine. Often wear Chain Mail or Leather Armour 

Open and Public

xx Personality

Azuma is extremely compassionate. Azuma may seem a little distant at times due to his troubled past. Azuma is extremely stubborn and will only back down to those he thinks are worthy. Azuma is rather social and often talks enough to prove it.
Azuma is rather mature and responsible. Azuma is almost always respectful unless he is angry. Azuma is extremely optimistic sometime to the point of insanity. Azuma is rather friendy and outgoing.

The Secret Side of Me

xx Greatest Secret

Azuma has never told anyone what happend on his 16th birthday.

xx Greatest Fear

Azuma was taught from a very young age to fear necromancy.

xx Greatest Desire

Azuma hopes to accomplish peace within the nations but fear it may be impossible.

This is His-story

xx History

Azuam's Father died before he was born it has been said his father was killed by a necromancer. Azuma's mother died immediately after child birth. Azuma was raised by a freelance warrior named Chaz. While Azuma believes Chaz was  a little to strict Azuma still loves him in a fatherly way. Chaz has been rumoured to have died while traveling to the Somnis Kingdom.
              In recent years Azuma has been a free drifter going wherever the wind takes him. While Azuma has never talked much his past a good bit of it is known. Azuma came to the Diamond Kingdom to find work and help any way he can.    

xx OOC Name

Azuma

xx Other Characters

No other character as of yet.

Bio form by ♠spade♠

[LightTogekiss]

Accepted ONCE changes are made

Okay, I'm really sorry to say that the bio isn't accepted, as I wouldn't like being told that at all myself, but there are several problems that can't be overlooked.

First of all, the one thing that pops out at me is the font color of the entire bio. That color is so light that it is practically impossible to read it without highlighting the words. Please either make it a more noticeable color or change shade to a darker one. Edit note: I realized that there is a darker skin which has a dark background which would make the light text look normal to you. If this is the case, perhaps you could leave it..

Another problem is that unless "Male" is a kingdom I've not heard about, you need to put an actual kingdom into the Kingdom section xD. Another problem is that the history and personality, as well as appearance are quite short. Admittedly they are as big as the bio asks for, so I won't ask you to change that, but for any more bios you make, I ask that each of those sections be filled with more information.

Now then, you may post here when you fix all of the changes and I will officially accept this bio. Again I'm really sorry about this..I just..Don't hate me..

Side note: I noticed that you have two bios, one with the simple and one with the complex bio form; I assumed that this was the one you wanted to be looked over because it was titled Azuma. If I was wrong, I can look at the other bio; otherwise, please delete the other one.

Final Edit: It has come to my attention that you are brand new to Proboards. If it is too hard for you to edit, tell one of us or post here and we will either help you edit it, or we will just let the bio go as it is

Last Edit I swear: Azuma Nagato please change your name to Azuma or Azuma's full name so we can know who you are. you can do this in Profile-->Edit-->Personal Settings

[Ginger]

2x Accepted Comments!!

Welcome to the site, and proboard forums. The forums are still new to you, so the next time you get on the cbox I will give you a website link that describes everything need to know about proboard forums. Sorry if the forums caused any problems for you.

The bio format was created by Spade for new users to the forum and large roleplaying sites. I will accept this, however the next bio will not be accepted with meeting the minimum requirement. This bio earns a seventy and it is literally leaning on the side of no acceptance. I am thankful you came to the site to check it out, but please next bio try for more description, personality, and history. Those three main points decide just how important and amazing a character can be with his/her character plotlines and development. By reaching the minimum points of those you are cutting into your own character. I hope you prove me wrong and make the character with more possible development as you rp him. The next bio will be required for longer results, else I will not be the one to accept it.

Notes from person.