Sunflower Borialias

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(Princess) Sunflower Borialias, Daughter of Carloman Borialias and Celestia 

Main Information;; The Known

xx Nicknames

Sunny, Podsolnechnik, light, Princess (though no one should call her that), and Bubbles.

xx Age / Birthday

17/ April 21 (early spring)

xx Gender

Female

xx Kingdom / Providence

Crystal

xx Occupation

Princess

xx Society / Group

Royalty.

xx Rank/Class

Yes. Princess.

xx Weapons

Dagger hidden within the folds of her dress. (has training with sword)

xx Magic

none

The Mirror Room

xx Face Claim

Seychelles from Hetalia (they have unofficial names but I don't want to confuse you)

xx Appearance

Long brown hair in pigtails with ribbons in them, long dresses that are typically a blue or a white color, brown eyes, and white skin. She always carries a silver backed brush that belonged to her mother in the garter belt where her dagger is hidden. She will never use it unless it is absolutely necessary. Even though she is younger than her brother she is only two inches shorter than him. Her height is 5 '2'. She is beautiful but doesn't actually believe so herself. She looks carefree but always worries about what will happen to her next. 

Open and Public

xx Personality

shy, quiet, stubborn, happy-go-lucky, bubbly (when around people she likes), nice (always), pure-hearted, sings when she feels like it, truthful (most of the time unless she finds it necessary to lie), and skittish. She is skittish around people in general because that she's afraid that they might work for her brother and doesn't want to go back to the castle until she is ready to. She was trained by males because most females don't get the kind of education she did. Females of the Crystal area are of lower class than males and so she is very shy when voicing her strong opinions on something. She sings so that she doesn't feel lonely. She's nice because that's what she believes is the right thing to do. She's happy-go-lucky and bubbly because her brother is so serious all the time that she felt like she had to be the light in the castle.

The Secret Side of Me

xx Greatest Secret

Doesn't want anyone to know she's royal so she pretends to be common. She stole money for her journey away from the castle (one of her biggest regrets). 

xx Greatest Fear

Her half-brother would find her before she is ready for the big fight. (see greatest desire)

xx Greatest Desire

To achieve equality status with her half-brother by eventually challenging him to a pokemon fight for the throne. Until then, she wishes to stay hidden wherever she can.

Out of This World

xx Pokemon

Charmander: female

This is His-story

xx History

Parents died the week before her 11th birthday, then her older brother took over the throne. She was left alone with no one to care for her. She still remembers the night that it happened. She greeted the courtier with a smile, "Did they come early? I really want to see what they got me this time!" My half-brother took some time out of his studies to see what the advisor summoned him for but he said nothing. The courtier sadly shook his head while the words echoed throughout the room, "The king and Queen are dead." I was in shock and froze in fear of the truth, "D-dead... They can't be." My brother demanded, "What Happened?" Silence permeated the room until the advisor said, "I suppose since my young master is too young, I have to take the throne. Naturally, he will assume the duties of one befitting his station one day so his studies will be more strenuous this day forward. However, the young Princess will continue her studies like her father would have wished. I will teach her myself from time to time how to defend herself. These are troubled times, I'm afraid because such a thing is necessary."

The next week, when it should have been my birthday ball, it was my parent's funeral. Even though all I wanted to do was bawl my eyes out, I held back my tears. I felt one slip down my cheek though, and another as it joined the first one. Thankfully I had hidden my face behind a black veil so no one could see me. The whole country of the Crystal Kingdom mourned with us. I suddenly felt a drop from the sky, I thought; It's just rain... Don't be silly. I looked up anyway and the sky was clear except for one pink flying pokemon darting away with tears in it's eyes. My heart shattered as I saw it cry so I chased after it hoping to comfort the poor thing. It suddenly stopped and waved goodbye as it saw me. I found myself feeling happier so I waved back as it darted away. I sat there wondering what that type of pokemon was, I had never seen anything like it before. The advisor ran after me... "What are you staring at?" I found myself lying, "I am just staring at the clouds." He offered me his hand and a small smile, "Here, let's go see the King one last time." I nodded and I placed the last flower on their grave. At the reception, all I heard was everyone speculations about how my parents died. I heard Auntie Marie(the Baroness of Haughtington) whisper behind her fan, "I heard that someone poisoned the poor little orphan's parents. In my opinion, I think they might have wanted to start a civil war." She always was a little too bold for Crystal Kingdom. My Uncle John (the Baron of Haughtington) who normally lets her have her way, "Watch it, Marie these walls have ears." A grayish green cloak caught my eye, I've heard about the rangers all my life but it's the first time I saw one up close and he looked just a few years older than me. He was with an adult ranger as they approached me, being royal meant I had nothing to fear from them but it set me on edge. They both bowed to the advisor, my half-brother, and me telling me of their condolences. I bow back, telling them in my quiet voice, "Thank you." There were still other rumors floating around about what actually happened but I didn't care to hear them. All I know is that my parents are dead and I didn't care how they died. My Dad made sure that I got an education unlike all the other Ladies in Crystal Kingdom because he honestly wanted women to have more rights but he couldn't do anything too drastic so the women bigots out there wouldn't rebel against him. He gave me lessons of history, etiquette, swordplay, social studies, geography, language, survival skills, singing, dancing, cooking, math, watching pokemon battles, and disguise. Don't be fooled by how many of them their are, they are each not that long of classes. Often times I find myself in the garden or in my father's study then came to sit on his lap but, those days are over now. After the party was over the rangers stayed to talk with the advisor. I heard them say, "We are staying for a while to make sure whoever did that to their parents would not happen again." The next day I resumed my schedule of classes. The classes were taught by Gerald Renalds, one of our four tutors of the house. My brother's tutor was Bernard Hayshaw and Daniel Sutcliff. We have one female tutor and her name is Helga Regor she teaches me the etiquette, dance, and singing classes. The rest of my classes are taught by Gerald Renalds. For seven moons the rangers stayed always nearby and constantly vigilant. Once they thought the danger was over they went off to another mission. The day after the rangers left after her studies she ran off past the palace garden gates because she heard a scream. She didn't even think about it as she wanted to help whoever or whatever it is that was hurting. She ended up in the forest behind the castle. She heard it again and thought it was the cry of a pokemon. She came into a clearing where there was a charamander being attacked by a archen. The charmander had curled itself up into a ball and trying to keep from being attacked. The charmander screamed again as I get inbetween the charmander and the archen. I yelled, "Go away! The charmander has done nothing to you! Shoo, Archen!"







 One night she got up and ran away when he was sleeping. She doubted that if it weren't for the fact that he was to set up her marriage that he would notice she was gone.

xx OOC Name

Podsolnechnik

xx Other Characters

Bio form by ♠spade♠

[Jakob Klein]

1: you forgot to put the name at the top of the page.
2: Society/Group is for stuff like the Official Societies. Sunflower would be in Royalty.
3:Rules say personality has to at least have 2 paragraphs (i know i told you about it in chat, but i'm giving you a list here, so i'll make it complete)
4: This may not be an issue, but the template only asks for 3 pokemon descriptions, and you have what looks like 12. additionally, as part of the royal family, i'm willing to bet your a canon character, and get to pick. again, not staff, so i could be wrong about this.
5: OOC name is what you use in chat (Podsolnechnik)
6: Other characters is for other characters YOU made, so King Narc doesn't go on that list; he's Bakeneko's.

[♠spade♠]

Pending Comments!!

Please read all of the pending notes and make changes as needed. 

First off, welcome to Perish song! We are happy to have you as one of the first members on the form. Thank you so much for joining the site and creating a character. I have a few things to say about your bio, please don't fret on them, if you finish them then you can probably play your character. We have a double accepting system, so if I accept your character, another staff member has to also. 

Anyway, to start with, I would like to say that your appearance, Personality, and History are a bit short. I know that we didn't put a paragraph size for the appearance, but it is really short for a bio and (unless ginger thinks otherwise) could you at least make a paragraph for what your princess looks like? For history and personality we require 2 paragraphs for a bio acceptance. Try to explain as much about your character as possible. 

Also, I was just wondering if you had a picture to put within the top of the bio of your character where the image says picture. 

That is all I have for right now. If there is anything you have questions about, please let me know.

Notes from Spade.

[Deleted]

Oct 26, 2013 18:34:07 GMT -6 @podsolnechnik said:

(Princess) Sunflower Borialias, Daughter of Carloman Borialias and Celestia 

Main Information;; The Known

xx Nicknames

Sunny, Podsolnechnik, light, Princess (though no one should call her that), and Bubbles.

xx Age / Birthday

17/ April 21 (early spring)

xx Gender

Female

xx Kingdom / Providence

Crystal

xx Occupation

Princess

xx Society / Group

Royalty.

xx Rank/Class

Yes. Princess.

xx Weapons

Dagger hidden within the folds of her dress. (has training with sword)

xx Magic

none

The Mirror Room

xx Face Claim

Seychelles from Hetalia (they have unofficial names but I don't want to confuse you)

xx Appearance

Long brown hair in pigtails with ribbons in them, long dresses that are typically a blue or a white color, brown eyes, and white skin. She always carries a silver backed brush that belonged to her mother in the garter belt where her dagger is hidden. She will never use it unless it is absolutely necessary. Even though she is younger than her brother she is only two inches shorter than him. Her height is 5 '2'. She is beautiful but doesn't actually believe so herself. She looks carefree but always worries about what will happen to her next. 

Open and Public

xx Personality

shy, quiet, stubborn, happy-go-lucky, bubbly (when around people she likes), nice (always), pure-hearted, sings when she feels like it, truthful (most of the time unless she finds it necessary to lie), and skittish. She is skittish around people in general because that she's afraid that they might work for her brother and doesn't want to go back to the castle until she is ready to. She was trained by males because most females don't get the kind of education she did. Females of the Crystal area are of lower class than males and so she is very shy when voicing her strong opinions on something. She sings so that she doesn't feel lonely. She's nice because that's what she believes is the right thing to do. She's happy-go-lucky and bubbly because her brother is so serious all the time that she felt like she had to be the light in the castle.

The Secret Side of Me

xx Greatest Secret

Doesn't want anyone to know she's royal so she pretends to be common. She stole money for her journey away from the castle (one of her biggest regrets). 

xx Greatest Fear

Her half-brother would find her before she is ready for the big fight. (see greatest desire)

xx Greatest Desire

To achieve equality status with her half-brother by eventually challenging him to a pokemon fight for the throne. Until then, she wishes to stay hidden wherever she can.

Out of This World

xx Pokemon

Dragon egg type, firetype pokemon, watertype,  monster egg, grass egg, grasstype, poison type, and water egg type. (the three I based this decision on is Chramander, Bulbasaur, and Squirtle)(if I get to choose then Charmander: preferably female).

This is His-story

xx History

Parents died the week before her 11th birthday, then her older brother took over the throne. She was left alone with no one to care for her. She still remembers the night that it happened. She greeted the courtier with a smile, "Did they come early? I really want to see what they got me this time!" My half-brother took some time out of his studies to see what the advisor summoned him for but he said nothing. The courtier sadly shook his head while the words echoed throughout the room, "The king and Queen are dead." I was in shock and froze in fear of the truth, "D-dead... They can't be." My brother demanded, "What Happened?" Silence permeated the room until the advisor said, "I suppose since my young master is too young, I have to take the throne. Naturally, he will assume the duties of one befitting his station one day so his studies will be more strenuous this day forward. However, the young Princess will continue her studies like her father would have wished. I will teach her myself from time to time how to defend herself. These are troubled times, I'm afraid because such a thing is necessary." The next week, when it should have been my birthday ball, it was my parent's funeral. Even though all I wanted to do was bawl my eyes out, I held back my tears. I felt one slip down my cheek though, and another as it joined the first one. Thankfully I had hidden my face behind a black veil so no one could see me. The whole country of the Crystal Kingdom mourned with us. I suddenly felt a drop from the sky, I thought; It's just rain... Don't be silly. I looked up anyway and the sky was clear except for one pink flying pokemon darting away with tears in it's eyes. My heart shattered as I saw it cry so I chased after it hoping to comfort the poor thing. It suddenly stopped and waved goodbye as it saw me. I found myself feeling happier so I waved back as it darted away. I sat there wondering what that type of pokemon was, I had never seen anything like it before. The advisor ran after me... "What are you staring at?" I found myself lying, "I am just staring at the clouds." He offered me his hand and a small smile, "Here, let's go see the King one last time." I nodded and I placed the last flower on their grave. At the reception, all I heard was everyone speculations about how my parents died. I heard Auntie Marie(the Baroness of Haughtington) whisper behind her fan, "I heard that someone poisoned the poor little orphan's parents. In my opinion, I think they might have wanted to start a civil war." She always was a little too bold for Crystal Kingdom. My Uncle John (the Baron of Haughtington) who normally lets her have her way, "Watch it, Marie these walls have ears." A grayish green cloak caught my eye, I've heard about the rangers all my life but it's the first time I saw one up close and he looked just a few years older than me. He was with an adult ranger as they approached me, being royal meant I had nothing to fear from them but it set me on edge. They both bowed to the advisor, my half-brother, and me telling me of their condolences. I bow back, telling them in my quiet voice, "Thank you." There were still other rumors floating around about what actually happened but I didn't care to hear them. All I know is that my parents are dead and I didn't care how they died. My Dad made sure that I got an education unlike all the other Ladies in Crystal Kingdom because he honestly wanted women to have more rights but he couldn't do anything too drastic so the women bigots out there wouldn't rebel against him. He gave me lessons of history, etiquette, swordplay, social studies, geography, language, survival skills, singing, dancing, cooking, math, watching pokemon battles, and disguise. Don't be fooled by how many of them their are, they are each not that long of classes. Often times I find myself in the garden or in my father's study then came to sit on his lap but, those days are over now. After the party was over the rangers stayed to talk with the advisor. I heard them say, "We are staying for a while to make sure whoever did that to their parents would not happen again." The next day I resumed my schedule of classes. The classes were taught by Gerald Renalds, one of our four tutors of the house. My brother's tutor was Bernard Hayshaw and Daniel Sutcliff. We have one female tutor and her name is Helga Regor she teaches me the etiquette, dance, and singing classes. The rest of my classes are taught by Gerald Renalds. For seven moons the rangers stayed always nearby and constantly vigilant. Once they thought the danger was over they went off to another mission. The day after the rangers left after her studies she ran off past the palace garden gates because she heard a scream. She didn't even think about it as she wanted to help whoever or whatever it is that was hurting. She ended up on the beach behind the castle. She heard it again and thought it was the cry of a pokemon. She came into a clearing where there was a charamander being attacked by a archen. The charmander had curled itself up into a ball and trying to keep from being attacked. The charmander screamed again as I get inbetween the charmander and the archen. I yelled, "Go away! The charmander has done nothing to you! Shoo, Archen!" The Archen circled around one more time and attacked me, this once. I held the little charmander in my arms and ran into the castle with it hot on my trail. I slammed the door while breathing heavily, "Are you okay, Charmander?" The Charmander was too exhausted to even respond. I took the little charmander to my room and laid it on my bed while wondering how the advisor would react when he saw I had a charmander in my room. I sit down next to it and lay on the bed. I wonder what gender the charmander is so that I can name it. I think of boy names: Charyou, Charlee, and Vondor. I think of girl names: Charm, Charlie, and Scarlet. I decided if it was male, I would name it Charles and if it was a girl I would name it Scarlet.  One night she got up and ran away when he was sleeping. She doubted that if it weren't for the fact that he was to set up her marriage that he would notice she was gone.

xx OOC Name

Podsolnechnik

xx Other Characters

Bio form by ♠spade♠

[Ginger]

Not Accepted Comments!!

I would like to say welcome to the site and taking the time to create a canon character. Now I know you know how to edit posts, so could you copy the post above this and paste it to your original post? Then delete the post above this one? I am going to assume you were unable to or the site would not let you edit, whichever it may be please try to keep your bio in a single post in this thread.

There are several thing within your bio that need to be fixed, first off there is a few typos specifically "she pretends to be common" I believe you meant commoner, so you may wanna fix that. As for other typos they're not really a big deal, and I will not point out every little one, so no worries there. Just that was the only one that really bothered me.

The history you did it a tad differently than most people, but that is okay just you changed first-person to third person near the ending and well there are several information areas you randomly skipped.

The first person to third swap happened about here " We have one female tutor and her name is Helga Regor she teaches me the etiquette, dance, and singing classes. The rest of my classes are taught by Gerald Renalds. For seven moons the rangers stayed always nearby and constantly vigilant. Once they thought the danger was over they went off to another mission. The day after the rangers left after her studies she ran off past the palace garden gates because she heard a scream. She didn't even think about it as she wanted to help whoever or whatever it is that was hurting." That can be confusing for others reading your bio, so you may wanna rewrite all the third into first or convert all first into third.

As for the mew part, I am trying to fathom how the mew will be no longer crying and just waving back, but honestly the only way is if the Mew saw the girl and was glade to be noticed by her. However the problem is that if Mew was actually hurt it would just turn invisible or a different pokemon form. Unless the fact it was hurt forced it show its true form, but if it truly felt that much pain it would not have bothered to wave. It could seem happier, but I doubt the mew would have waved to her. Maybe she could have imagined it, in which case you may wanna add that in there.


As for " I decided if it was male, I would name it Charles and if it was a girl I would name it Scarlet. One night she got up and ran away when he was sleeping. She doubted that if it weren't for the fact that he was to set up her marriage that he would notice she was gone." Add more detail on how she learned about the marriage set-up, who he was, just go into more detail here...


Most important thing about the History you may wanna fix, besides the need of commas, spacing this whole history needs to be spaced out. It seems to just be jumping one thing to another, if you spaced it out it'll be a lot easier to read and it will be a whole lot better.

As for Pokemon the charmander, did she run away with it? Or did she leave it, be sure to add that in the History. If she happened to have taken it with her add that under Pokemon section of the bio, since it is her pokemon.

That is all I have to say about the bio right now, please go back and try to add commas. It is not a big deal, but commas can decide whether you save or kill a whole family, no seriously they do.

Added: She cannot be a total sword expert, I am giving you a heads up. her father wanted to teach her things that would not catch much attention, I would consider swordsmanship a serious attention getter. If he did teach her, in secret due to the whole women's right thing, then it would have been in secret and rarely. Meaning she will not be as good as Rangers, knights, most male characters, so please keep that in mind. She can know the basics and that is it, she will have to be taught everyday. She will probably be weaker than most males as well, maybe possibly stronger a tad than most Royalty females, but compared to commoner females probably not.

Notes from Ginger.